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This is a short story I wrote once that was based on a dream I had. When I woke up from that dream, I luckily wrote down everything I remembered, and from those notes, I made this.
It was originally written in Norwegians, so all the names are in Norwegian.. Hope it doesn't make it difficult to read..
Also, this is my first attempt since junior high to write a short story. Normally I write novels.. XD
So if you have any critique, let me know
I wanted to post this so you could have something else to read while waiting for SPIKE to get finished. :3
I'm very curious to hear what you guys think of this.. *nervous*
ok, I'll shut up now..
story created and written by: Elise Marie Syvertsen 2011
It was originally written in Norwegians, so all the names are in Norwegian.. Hope it doesn't make it difficult to read..
Also, this is my first attempt since junior high to write a short story. Normally I write novels.. XD
So if you have any critique, let me know
I wanted to post this so you could have something else to read while waiting for SPIKE to get finished. :3
I'm very curious to hear what you guys think of this.. *nervous*
ok, I'll shut up now..
story created and written by: Elise Marie Syvertsen 2011
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This short story has an extremely great use of imagery. Your use of words paint a very vivid image for the reader. Your style of writing is fantastic as well. This story is very well written. I would even go as far as to say you are as skilled with words as the professionals. This piece had great emotionally impact. And was all in all a very powerful piece. I honestly have nothing negative to say about this. I could see it as though it were a film playing out due to how excellent the imagery was. I think your two strongest skills here are imagery and ability to convey all levels of emotions. It makes the reader get a sense of empathy. I could feel the pain, the sorrow despite never having gone through these things myself. Bravo OOmi! Hands down, the best short story I have read in years.